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Bad Writing: To Lean More

Here’s a sentence written by someone who has writing problems. I read it recently in an advertisement. Do you see anything wrong with it?

To learn more about the program, we’ve set up a web site at www.website.com.

The problem: The sentence tells you that the advertiser learned more about a program by setting up a web site. It seems likely that the advertiser intended for readers to learn more. The sentence should either mention that readers can learn more from the web site, or it should explain the real reason the advertiser built the web site.

The solution: Here are some alternative statements that deliver on the advertiser’s intent:

To learn more about the program, visit our website at www.website.com.

To provide more information about the program, we’ve set up a web site at www.website.com.

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